酷兔英语

儿子2010年春节"巨著""The


Middle-earth 1 -- the Gold Mystery"


(《中土世界--黄金之谜》)现已完成五个章节,3773字,他说故事才开头,刚刚召集好了超自然的军队,战斗尚未开始。【我希望他这个故事能够有个结尾,因为他有一个习惯,那就是写了很多故事的开头,但从来写不到结尾就放下了。】。我把他的这篇"巨著"称之为山寨版《魔戒》,因为其中很多情节与他刚刚看过的魔戒三部曲类似。我将经过我和他一起修订(主要是更改了一些时态不一致的错误)后的成稿一一发表在博客上,不是为了恭维他的想象力或者英语写作能力,只是想把他的成长记录下来。我觉得不要说过一年,就是过一天,也许他都不会再拥有这样的创作激情和想象力,以及勇敢的英文胆量,我要把这瞬间留下,并与你分享。






Chapter


1






It was in the second world of Middle-earth, a world which was


written in the story books for million times. So I am also going to


write about this.


Mary, Elisabeth, Edwards and William were brothers and sisters.


They live in Millong. Millong was a city in Middle-earth. It was


built on a mountain. The rich people lived on the top and the poor


people lived at the foot of the mountain. Millong belonged to the


Clesiney Kingdom.


One day, Mary and her sisters and brothers were playing in a


forest. They walked so long and so they were lost. They saw a hut


and they started to feel afraid.


"It is becomingcold here,"


said William, "I bet that we should go


back."


Suddenly, a half-man-half-goat came out of the hut.


"Don't walk here.


It's dangerous! Come in, it is safe


here," he said.


They came in the hut. They saw two people sitting ina chair.


"I am Ationythi," said the


half-man-half-goat, "this is Ludis and this is


Titan."


"Who are you?" asked


Titan.


"I am Elizabeth, she's Mary,


he's William and he's


Edwards," said Elizabeth, "we


come from Millong."


"What's you


surname?" asked Titan.


"Athantik," said Mary.


"Athantik?" repeated


Titan.


"Are you a descendant of King


Cyrano?" asked Ationythi.


"I don't know, but who


is..."asked William.


"He was the last king of Sidem Kingdom. Cyril


was his great grandfather," said Ludis.


"But we


don't..." moaned Edwards.


"I will tell you," said


Titan, "it is not Clesiney Kingdom here, and you


are in another country now. You are now in Dormer Kingdom. A great


man called Mondrian made a bangle. The person who wears the bangle


will live forever but if the bangle falls off from the arm of the


person who holds it, the person will die. Mondrian lived for 1000


years. His student, Sandor, had stolen the bangle. He built a tower


and used his magic to make a stone. The stone was called


"The Braun Stone"; the stone


was made from gold. The stone was a powerful stone. It could make a


large army of darkness. Sandor used the stone to control


Middle-earth. 1000 years later, Humans and elfs allied to attack


Sandor. Sandor used his army to fight. The king of Sidem, Cyrano


the Eleventh used the King's Sword to fight


Sandor. Sandor was badly injured by Cyrano. 3 years later, his hand


was cut by Cyrano in another battle. But he


didn't die, because he became a part of the


bangle. So he killed Cyrano using the bangle, and


Cyrano's son ran away from Middle-earth. Sandor


hid into a box. 300 years later, he came out. He put on his bangle.


He was very weak. He was just a shadow of evil. He went to his


tower. He hid in the deep ground and absorbed the evil fire. 5000


years later, he became strong. He put on his armature and destroyed


the nearby cities, and now he controls this kingdom, too. He has


given our king, Bruhord, a piece of gold and the piece of gold


controlled him. And Ludis is his son."


"The army of Sandor, which was called orcs,


was looking for me, so we built a hut. The ocrs cannot see the


hut," said Ludis, "but I think


that you four might be ..."


"Might be what?" asked


William.


"Who is your father?" asked


Titan.


"He's


Cabinda," said Edwards.


"You four are the king of


Sidem!" yelled Ludis.


"But why..." asked Mary.


"Cabinda, we are looking for him in these


places. He is a descendant of Cyrano!" said


Ationythi.


"Don't shout too much. I


have heard the sound of ocrs," whispered


Titan.


"Ok, my lord, who is the


oldest?" asked Ludis.


"Elisabeth," said


William.


"Ok, Queen Elisabeth, I bet you should go to


the capital, Minadusidy," said Ludis.


"No, Lord Ludis, they all need to go


there," said Titan.


"But we don't have many


horses!" said Ludis.


"No, no, no. We have a


dragon," said Titan, "the king


of dragons, dragon Thebes, your owner is here,


come!"


"Why don't you tell


me?" said Ludis, "Thebes, the


king of the dragons."


"Climb up to the dragon's


back!" Titan yelled.


Then Titan got on the dragon's back.


"Come up, the orcs are


coming!" yelled Titan.


They all came up to the dragon's back.


"Thebes, fly!" yelled


Titan.


They started to fly. They went out of the forest.


"Who are you?" asked


Mary.


"I am the praetor of Sidem, son of


Bromises," said Titan,


"don't look down, you will be


scared!"


"No! The orcs are coming to


Millong!" yelled Mary.


"What!" shouted Elisabeth,


"My father was there!"


"Don't worry, I will help


you!" yelled Titan, "Thebes,


kill these orcs!"


"No!" yelled Edwards.


"Father!" shouted


Elisabeth.


"No!" yelled Titan,


"he shouldn't


die!"


An orcs killed Elisabeth's father because he


stopped him to get in the city.


"Pick up his body," said


Titan.


The orcs saw the dragon and they all ran away.